One woman's search for knowledge, truth, beauty, serenity, peace, harmony and all that crap.
Published on May 25, 2006 By Ms Mitchell In Poetry
I found a scrap of a piece four years old and decided to work with it.

Fencing

There are soccer moms
And Little League moms.
I am a fencing mom.

Fencing is an elegant combination of
Ballet and thumb wrestling.
Competitors dance up and down
The electrified strip.
A pantomimed tango—
With sharp objects.

Fencers themselves are an odd mix
D&D geeks, feminists, and elitists
Rich kids bored with pony club.
Then there’s Katie--a poor kid
From aristocratic bloodlines,
Lucky to find a teacher
Who worked for free.
Beside the boys were cute.

There are conventions,
Vestiges of chivalric etiquette.
Salute before pretending to kill.

My daughter pulls on another persona
Along with her lamé.
The everyday Katie is an intelligent,
Beautiful, moody smart-ass,
You know, a 17-year-old girl.
When she steps onto the strip
She becomes
Driven, focused, relentless.

This Katie is thrilling because she is untouchable.
Even with her face covered
By a black mesh mask,
Her carriage tells me she’s wearing
Her Mona Lisa smirk.
“I’m holding a sword.
You might want to stop
Throwing your chest on it.”

Sometimes she will stand still as a cat and wait
Her opponent will expend his energy
On a feint that she doesn’t fall for.
Other times she is like a charging warrior princess
Whose ferocity causes strong men to cower.

She has just lost.
Even though she fenced beautifully,
Her opponent was nationally ranked.
Faster with a longer reach
And a lunge that covers acreage.
Even in defeat, she remains untouched.
She sips water and calculates.
She finds the chink in the armor.
An elbow swung wide
Allowing for an inside shot.

Katie has found that the kindest thing
To do for the divas is to help them
Mend their character flaws
By beating them.

Her next opponent,
An effete man with
A last name for a first name,
Actually whines,
“Geez, lady, it’s a sword,
Not a baseball bat.”
Saber can be painful. Stick to epée.
Or maybe yoga.

The mask comes off and she greets him
With an ingenuous, friendly smile
And he isn’t even allowed the luxury
Of hating her.

Comments
on May 25, 2006
Wow! Confident and exciting writing. You made me not only feel the electricity of this ballet a deux, I also felt Katie's smirk on my own face. You took me inside Katie and I was secretly wanting to be this cool, feline predator. Excellent character description and I absolutely respect and admire your facility with the language. Any writer who can wax rhapsodic about D&D geeks, anachronistic chivalry and whiners who say "Geez" and do it as seamlessly as you, well, that's my kind of writer.

**** (four stars) on the Moskowitz Meter

Thanks, and now I'll read it again.
on May 26, 2006
Maggie, that was priceless!!!

As one who has faced that beautiful "Mona Lisa Smirk" with Epee, Foil and Saber in hand, I can second everything you say here! Katie is an opponent who will give you the humbling you so richly need... but then show off the bruises delivered by those who were lucky enough to get in a good shot... she showed them with pride (didn't she).

My favorite shot against her was in a very rare opportunity... she took her eyes off my face... her error earned her a quick Saber lash to the mask... I never once saw her make that mistake again. ;~D

wonderful writing... I'll also second Buddah's rating on the Moskowitz Meter. ;~D
on Jun 01, 2006
Buddha and Ted,
Thanks for the compliments.
Yes, Katie was proud of her welts and bruises. If she broke a finger that was even better.

Thanks for reading my stuff and commenting, guys. The feedback helps.
Maggie