One woman's search for knowledge, truth, beauty, serenity, peace, harmony and all that crap.
Published on November 19, 2007 By Ms Mitchell In Fiction Writing
Tom returned to Two Rivers late the next night. When Lily woke up she saw his sorry looking little pick up in the yard and the storm flag up.
Jared and Anna had planned on inviting friends over that afternoon, so they were pouting.
“Why can’t we at least have a TV like normal people?” Jared demanded.
“Mr. Abbot says it lowers your IQ, and you can’t afford that,” Anna taunted.
“Shut up.”
“You shut up.”
Lily had had enough drama to last her at least a month, so of course, Frank chose that moment to pop into the kitchen.
“What’s all this noise about?”
The children were immediately silenced.
“You two are to go upstairs, get back into your pajamas, and get back in bed until I think you are ready to start your day.” Frank shook his finger at them.
“What do you say, to Mr. Abbot, children?” Lily asked them.
“Yes sir.” Anna said.
“You’re not the boss of me,” Jared challenged.
“No, but I am the boss of your mother. Unless you want to get her fired, I suggest you get your tail upstairs, now young man. And don’t you ever even think of defying either me or her. Do you understand?”
Jared’s “yes sir” was barely audible.
As soon as the children were out of the room, Lily turned to Frank and said, “You have no right to discipline my children. They are my children.”
“Fine, you’re fired.”
“Fine.”
“What’s for lunch?” Frank asked.
“What are you fixing?” Lily returned.
“I could grill us a couple steaks.”
Lily just rolled her eyes, “Fine, you grill steaks and I’ll parent my children.”
“Parent is not a verb.”
“It is now.”
“They’re good kids you know.”
“Thank you.”
“You’re doing a good job. Sometimes a grouchy voice helps.”
“What other voice do you have?”
“You’re still fired.”
“Yeah, yeah.”
Frank did indeed grill steaks and burgers for lunch. The children were amazingly peaceful for the rest of the day. Frank amazed them with the bird calls he could imitate. After they had cleared the table and loaded the dishwasher, they went upstairs and had a lengthy ping-pong tournament.
Lily sat alone in the kitchen. She liked her suite to sleep in. But in the evening when the house was quiet, she preferred the kitchen. She sat at the table with her scriptures, her journal and a cup of hot chocolate.
Tom tapped on the back door and Lily jumped knocking the chair over backwards. Tom had a bra hanging from his finger.
“Whose is this?”
“Well, it’s not Anna’s.”
“Well, it’s not yours.”
“How do you know?”
“Well, this is a B-cup and, not that I’ve been looking, but you are at least a double D.”
“Excuse me?” Lily spluttered.
“This was hanging on my door knob. Interesting welcome home gift.”
“I’m sorry about that. My sister was having a bit of a crisis and she went swimming to clear her head.”
“And she’s a B-cup.”
“Give me that!” She snatched the undergarment from his finger.
“By the way, will you pose for me sometime?”
“Get out of here!”
“My house.”
“My kitchen.”
“Seriously, would you pose for me?”
“That is the worst pick up line I have ever heard.”
“I honestly need a model.”
“A fully-clothed model?”
“Actually, I need a nude, but I will settle for bathing-suit. Is that an acceptable compromise?”
“I don’t think that’s a good idea, Tom.”
Tom nodded, “OK,” then he grinned mischievously, “then, can I have your sister’s number?”

Comments
on Nov 19, 2007

Do what you like, but generally speaking it is considered pretty bad form to spam-post 7 articles of unformatted text in as many minutes.

 

If you don't use carriage returns or paragraph breaks anyways why not just post all seven sections in one article? That way you aren't spamming JU with "recently posted" articles.

 

Addtionally, if you want people to read anything you post a few breaks in the body of the text will help you towards your goal. Formatting isn't everything, but pages and pages of stream-of-consciouness stuff tend to be ignored in the long haul (and can even get your account locked if the spam-posting goes on long enough).

 

on Nov 19, 2007

Keep it going!  You got me hooked.  Weird about Zaya!  That one caught me by surprise!

But I like this live in arrangement!  Lots of possibilities!

on Nov 19, 2007
Greywar, thank you for helping me with JU etiquette. I'm still a newbie in many ways.

My paragraphs and line breaks didn't paste. I should have double checked. Thanks for the constructive criticism.
on Nov 20, 2007
My paragraphs and line breaks didn't paste.


A pretty common issue here actually. I only mention it because it does tend to be offputting and newcomers do want readers (one assumes).


I even busted my buddy Hyperborean Wanderer (and many others) about the same issue.


If I came off as abrasive well... it is beause I am pretty abrasive. I apologize nontheless.

Draginol has a lot of great posts regarding readability and reader-friendly blog posting over here (under Favorite Articles). He runs this site so his advice probably runs towards the "rule" variety really.
on Dec 25, 2007

Merry Christmas, Maggie!

 

I Miss You!